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Blog #13

I chose chapter chapter 8 of the they say  I say book about “connecting parts”. in this chapter they discuss topic like timing sentence structure, combining sentences, and using different words to combine sentences together. while reading I realized that  I need to use similar words and repeat key terms and phrases in order to make my paper sound more fluid.

revisions:

original

In order to better understand the culmination of art and medical science we look further into John Lehrer’s “The Future of Science… Is Art?”, the main goal of his work was to show how neuroscience and physics can be exemplified by arts. He explains that “what neuroscience needs is a new method , one that’s able to construct complex representation of the mind that aren’t built from the bottom up. Sometimes, the whole is best understood in terms of a whole.” , Art can help neuroscience mostly finalize the the practical understanding of consciousness. In neuroscience an aspect of medical biology they study how the brain works and how the brain can become affected by injuries and different stimulus.  You come to a better understanding of how art can affect this specific science because we can use pictures, videos, and music to better understand the brain . theories brought up by scientific communities cause major turmoil because some of these topics are not proven which creates a barrier between different scientific communities creating a scientific divided. Arts can help break this barrier and create equilibrium among scientific communities by allowing people to better understand medical science.

revision:

Science needs a new method to better understand the importance of some theories and hypotheses. In order to better understand the culmination of art and medical science we look further into John Lehrer’s “The Future of Science… Is Art?”, the main goal of his work was to show how neuroscience and physics can be exemplified by arts. He explains that “what neuroscience needs is a new method , one that’s able to construct complex representation of the mind that aren’t built from the bottom up. Sometimes, the whole is best understood in terms of a whole.” , Art can help neuroscience mostly finalize the the practical understanding of theories about consciousness and the mind . In neuroscience an aspect of medical biology they study how the brain works and how the brain can become affected by injuries and different stimulus.  You come to a better understanding of how art can affect this specific science because we can use pictures, videos, and music to better understand the brain, which is art. theories brought up by scientific communities cause major argument. Along with that some of these topics are not proven which creates a barrier between different scientific communities. Arts can help break this barrier and create equilibrium among scientific communities by allowing people to better understand medical science.

1 Comment

  1. elishaemerson

    Better! Don’t forget to use something like Grammarly to check for wayward commas and/or periods. I also encourage you to read your formal draft out loud before handing it in. Your revision was more specific and I can see your argument taking front stage. Great work.

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