For my final paper I plan on making sure that all of my grammar and spelling are perfect. I don’t want to have any little mistakes that cost me points off of my paper. my quotes need to me shorter and I need to add more of my own opinion into this paper. the overall goal of my paper is to be interesting and grasp the readers attention. I feel as though I need a stringer thesis as well as stronger claim sentences that will make my paper more interesting and grasping. my plan is to ask my RA, peers, and roommates to read my paper over to make sure that I have all of the important information needed to have good structure in my essay. my biggest challenge will be to make my paper shorter and more straight and to the point( my paper in broad at the moment), I will use office hours as well as technology like grammarly to make sure my paper is structured very well. I will send professor Emerson parts or paragraphs of my essay that I think need expansion and revision.
multi modal paper:
I’m going to take a picture of the one coast and places in after my paragraph that discusses the Maine coast.
ill use this link as a picture for an image of the Dominican Republic. https://ntripping.com/dominican-republic-travel-tips/
I’m going to record audio of the ocean and place that in my paper as an audio clip.
I’m changing the font of my title to something more intriguing and fun.
I plan on some how incorporating some form of yin and yang to show the relationship that sense ad form drive have with each other.
my main goal is to provide visual and audio pieces that are symbolic and meaning full to my audience and my self. this will make my multi modal paper far more interesting and make it more impactful for my audience.
Outline:
Thesis: Beauty as a whole has countless meanings, whether to not your beauty Is the same as others doesn’t matter, throughout the University of New England beauty has countless meanings.
Claim1: in order to understand what beauty is you have to take a look into Armstrongs description of the sense and from drives relationship with beauty
Quote 1: “there is sense drive which lives in the moment and seeks immediate seeks immediate gratification .it craves contact and possession.” (Armstrong 1)”The form dive:the inner demand for coherence over time, for abstract understanding and rational order”(Armstrong 1 )
Claim 2:I agree with Armstrong that it takes a balance contact and understanding to realize the true beauty in things.
Quote 2: “in this case-a case of beauty-both drives are at full power. bu they do not work against one another. instead, they co-operate, and Schiller’s point is that to experience a statue is that in this dual way is to find it beautiful.”(Armstrong 2)
Claim 3: In “Beauty is simpler, and less special, then we realize” from New York university explains how over time scientists, psychologists, and philosophers have come to a conclusion that over time beauty has become simpler than many think.
Quote 3:“researchers anticipate that a clearer understanding of beauty could change the way we understand decision making” (Beauty is simpler, and less special then we realize)
Claim 4: students and others alike find beauty in places that you may never think you could find beauty.
Quote 4:” when I was younger I used to live in the Dominican republic and its a tropical island so that alone is already beautiful. however one moment that sticks with me to this day was when I was in a small village where there wasn’t a lot of people with substantial income. but I just noticed all the ways the people in the village got together, collected food, had great comradery, and everything was just joyful.” (sheahan podcast)
Claim 3: not only at the university but in surrounding areas people view beauty in the world naturally.
Quote 3:” after I took a trip to the Maine coast , since coming back from Florida, I don’t like palm trees and manicured beaches, I’m not looking for that I’m looking for a rustic, wild, untouched beach, and thats what Maine has. it represents how harsh New England is.”(Casey podcast)
In “Beauty is simpler, and less special, then we realize” from New York university explains how over time scientists, psychologists, and philosophers have come to a conclusion that over time beauty has become simpler than many think. I will use this article as a naysayer in my paper because it shows the other side of what beauty means to people. for example it provides a new view other than mine that beauty is less important and less special than so many people think. in one instance the article explains that “researchers anticipate that a clearer understanding of beauty could change the way we understand decision making”, this is a complex concept that shows how beauty changes our perspective on people and how we do every day tasks.
https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2018/08/180820113032.htm
New York University. “Beauty is simpler, and less special, than we realize: New analysis of long-studied feeling.” ScienceDaily. ScienceDaily, 20 August 2018. <www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2018/08/180820113032.htm>.
Podcasts:
Ryan Sheahan
Tehya Casey
In my podcast I interviewed someone with a totally different background which game me insight to places other than the United States specifically the Dominican Republic. My interviewee told me about his child hood and working together as a community which brought him happiness and gave him a sense of purpose. He described the way the village worked together, as beauty. my learned experience from Jose gave me a sense of inspiration to live everyday as my best life because a lot of people don’t have the technology that I have. It showed me to appreciate life more.
in Tehya’s podcast I learned about a family members experience with beaches in Maine and Florida, and how the commercialized beaches were nothing like the rough, rocky, and unkempt beaches of Maine. the beaches in Florida she explained were nothing like the beaches in Maine. the trash, tourists, commercialization, and advertisement of the beaches made her hate Florida and the beaches. her views of the Maine coast made her forget everything and leave her stress behind. she related beauty to the rustic coast which made me realize that everyone has a totally different view of art. it inspired me to be more grateful for where I am and where I go to school.
The concepts and values of beauty vary from person to person. overall beauty can represent anything from art, to food, and sunsets. the biggest concern is that people don’t value beauty properly. One specific instance, in “La bella vita”, author John Armstrong discusses views on art from, poet Friedrich Schiller’s point of view. he explains that you have to have two main ideas sense drive and form drive that need to work in tandem to see the true beauty in things. beauty in the world from my stand point is a representation of emotions and how beauty specifically can make you feel and remember aspects of life. in my community specifically at the University of New England, beauty to most people is a representation and love and happiness as well as good feelings. John Armstrong explains that “Schiller was convinced that to regard beauty as a luxury adornment or a social signifier was to miss the true potential of the experience, because for him the point of beauty was to elevate the soul”, beauty as a whole is meant to bring emotion to you and show you the true parts of life. Armstrong specifically explains this throughout his work and proves how different mechanisms need to be at balance for beauty to be shown through and through.
I chose chapter chapter 8 of the they say I say book about “connecting parts”. in this chapter they discuss topic like timing sentence structure, combining sentences, and using different words to combine sentences together. while reading I realized that I need to use similar words and repeat key terms and phrases in order to make my paper sound more fluid.
revisions:
original
In order to better understand the culmination of art and medical science we look further into John Lehrer’s “The Future of Science… Is Art?”, the main goal of his work was to show how neuroscience and physics can be exemplified by arts. He explains that “what neuroscience needs is a new method , one that’s able to construct complex representation of the mind that aren’t built from the bottom up. Sometimes, the whole is best understood in terms of a whole.” , Art can help neuroscience mostly finalize the the practical understanding of consciousness. In neuroscience an aspect of medical biology they study how the brain works and how the brain can become affected by injuries and different stimulus. You come to a better understanding of how art can affect this specific science because we can use pictures, videos, and music to better understand the brain . theories brought up by scientific communities cause major turmoil because some of these topics are not proven which creates a barrier between different scientific communities creating a scientific divided. Arts can help break this barrier and create equilibrium among scientific communities by allowing people to better understand medical science.
revision:
Science needs a new method to better understand the importance of some theories and hypotheses. In order to better understand the culmination of art and medical science we look further into John Lehrer’s “The Future of Science… Is Art?”, the main goal of his work was to show how neuroscience and physics can be exemplified by arts. He explains that “what neuroscience needs is a new method , one that’s able to construct complex representation of the mind that aren’t built from the bottom up. Sometimes, the whole is best understood in terms of a whole.” , Art can help neuroscience mostly finalize the the practical understanding of theories about consciousness and the mind . In neuroscience an aspect of medical biology they study how the brain works and how the brain can become affected by injuries and different stimulus. You come to a better understanding of how art can affect this specific science because we can use pictures, videos, and music to better understand the brain, which is art. theories brought up by scientific communities cause major argument. Along with that some of these topics are not proven which creates a barrier between different scientific communities. Arts can help break this barrier and create equilibrium among scientific communities by allowing people to better understand medical science.
Both Yo-Yo-Ma and John Lehrer argue about how art should be apart of our day to day lives in school. In “Necessary Edges: Arts, Empathy, and Education” Yo-Yo-Ma argues that instead of STEM, science, technology, engineering, and math that it should be STEAM, science, technology, engineering, arts, and math. he discusses that “the values behind arts integration- collaboration, flexible thinking, and disciplined imagination- lead to the capacity to innovate”, he believes that art should be apart of STEM because it allows people to open there minds and constantly form new ideas. John Lehrer in “the Future of science is… Art?” argues that art is needed in science to better understand how and why different scientific things happen, specifically neuroscience and physics. he says that ” by taking these artistic explorations seriously, neuroscientists can better understand the holistic properties they are trying to parse. before you break something apart, it helps to know how it hangs together.”, this is Lehrer explaining how art can help near scientists piece together the images and people they are trying to help. art as a whole can help people learn and explore. Both Ma and Lehrer discuss how art is needed in society to better understand how things work and are interconnected. in the end they differ in reasons but come to the same conclusion that art is needed to help scientist and students explore and learn.
In todays world STEM has had a huge impact on the ways science technology engineering and math effect schools world wide. this aspect of most schools curriculum has impacted students from there job choices to there college and higher education decisions. With that being said the main goal of this is to educate students on subjects that they will use later in life. yo-yo Ma is renown musician that has won countless awards, he states that
“because the world economy is do hyper competitive, much of the focus in education these days fro Singapore to Shanghai to American schools is on STEM- science, technology, engineering, and math. as important as that is, it is short sighted. we need to add the empathetic reasoning of the arts to the mix-STEAM.”
this is an unrealistic and inefficient way to keep kids focused on the more complex and helpful subjects like STEM, if you add art into the equation there is too much going on for students to focus. they will lose track on there goal of learning more about STEM and become more focused on learning about art which is a subject that has no real meaning other than drawing and creating. art is far less important than anyone thinks it to be, it may strike imagination but engineering and technology do just that there is no need to add art into the curriculum.
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