While reading “Shitty First Drafts” and my own essay over and over again I realized things that make me frustrated and make me realize my mistakes. I realized that throughout my reading I need to expand my thoughts and shorten my quotes. it makes me frustrated that I didn’t do the right things during my essay. I realized that after my readings and revisions that I need to control my thoughts and shorten them on paper. I need to first write my ideas down, realize that I need to create a plan and then understand what happens next. My biggest challenge is that I need to shorten my quotes because they are too long and make my essay drown out my ideas. I plan to use grammerly to make sure I have the proper spelling and punctuation in my essay. The readings of the “Shitty First Drafts” have helped me to control my writing and make sure that it most importantly makes sense.
First drafts are frustrating for me too, but you don’t have to be perfect the first time. Regarding your quotes, a neat tool I use is artificially shortening your quotes. So instead of writing the entire quote you can skip any unimportant material by replacing it with “…” to show you skipped over some information. Also Scriben’s is a really good version of grammerly, I even prefer it over grammerly if you ever want to check it out.
Ryan,
It seems like you need to shorten some things. Look for repetition and cut it. This can be a good place to start.